Good and Evil

[billy]

Life and death, now good and evil. your on a role.

I used to think that killers were is 'that' needed.
the most perplexing breed of man, is 'of man' needed
the equation most denied would 'an' work better than 'the'
an answer by our best scholars. would it work better without 'an' eg; answers by our best scholars.

But evil is just tedious, are 'but and 'just' needed
a simple shell bulging with lice,
quite repellant to behold, is 'quite' needed, (repellent)
and not worth our philosphy. philosophy

Madness can never be explained
except in terms which render it
an ailment beyond our grasp,
obscure yet solid as belief. for me this verse feels a little weak (too telly)

What really captivates the mind
are those the killers leave behind,
the mothers, sons, the lovers, friends,
they who keep pity alive. i think this verse is great, a real good insight bearing in mind the topic

What does Light think
on meeting Dark?
Does the latter give his host
a morsel of his own being? for me this verse feels a little weak as well.

I like to think the flames of good
can handle any bleak tempest,
and shining fierce in night's landscape
immortal wicks will always burn. great closing, a little pretentious but it works really well for me.

for me it's a good poem in need of a minor edit. jmo

thanks for the read.