07-31-2011, 06:07 AM
i like the enjambment in the 1st line
if i have a nit it's the word poetry in a poem titled rabbit
but it's only a small nit, actually i'll take that back poetry does work.
the poetry of the rabbit. it works very well.
is 'your' needed on the 2nd line? it feels redundant.
i'm struggling to give any constructive feedback
for me it's good poem and works on more than one level,
they're are more rabbit than just rabbits.
the more i read it the better it gets
thanks for a great read (jmo)
if i have a nit it's the word poetry in a poem titled rabbit
but it's only a small nit, actually i'll take that back poetry does work.
the poetry of the rabbit. it works very well.
is 'your' needed on the 2nd line? it feels redundant.
i'm struggling to give any constructive feedback
for me it's good poem and works on more than one level,
they're are more rabbit than just rabbits.
the more i read it the better it gets
thanks for a great read (jmo)