The only shelter is my mind

[ICSoria]

I think Todd made a valid point. That first line seemed rather long and out of place. I know you are not going for a strict meter in this but meter is exactly what always seems to draw me to any poetry, even free verse. Since the meter in this seems to wander somewhat, I am mainly wondering, why even bother with the regular line-breaks? Not being critical, just wondering—I can always stand to learn something—and I believe the overall piece still has a good metric feel to it, enough to hold a reader’s interest. That (holding a reader's interest), should be the primary goal of any write.
Thanks for posting,

Sid