07-27-2011, 12:21 AM
(07-26-2011, 06:21 AM)Aish Wrote:AishAt the foot of the world,
I am the spider
in the center, of pearlescent secrets
intentionally disguised.
As delicate.
I liked this but I can hardly read it on my monitor because of the light color.
"in the center, of pearlescent secrets" is a great line. Nice visual.
At the foot of the world makes me think it's about to be stepped on,
I know this is probably intentional. I like to see spiders a little higher up.
At any rate a good read
David

