07-26-2011, 11:08 AM
the colour for me is a little hard on the eyes.
i don't think the comma after centre isn't needed.
other than that nit, it works for me, i thought
about the line space and at first thought no
but after a few reads i grew to like it, in such
a short poem i think it adds an extra dimension.
thanks for the read.
i don't think the comma after centre isn't needed.
other than that nit, it works for me, i thought
about the line space and at first thought no
but after a few reads i grew to like it, in such
a short poem i think it adds an extra dimension.
thanks for the read.