07-25-2011, 08:35 PM
Regardless of whether or not it's iambic it's an excellent triolet Bilbo, better than all mine put together, you git
I especially love the line break after "immerse." It reminds me of what Thomas Hardy said about how a slightly imperfect flow can sometimes improve a poem. Same with the break after "dream." This really shows your gift for blending naturalistic lines with form.
I especially love the line break after "immerse." It reminds me of what Thomas Hardy said about how a slightly imperfect flow can sometimes improve a poem. Same with the break after "dream." This really shows your gift for blending naturalistic lines with form.
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe