Stone (a terzanelle)

[Leanne]

I think the third person to first person jump is slightly jarring

I'm not at all sure what you mean here, David -- I intended the entire thing as a first-person-speaker address to a second "you" and don't really see a departure from that, unless you mean using "the skin" instead of "my skin"?

Also, of course every peach has cyanide in the seed, but I don't really read the first line as "I am the only peach with a poison seed" -- to me it's no different to saying "I am the girl with long blonde hair". I can't imagine what else I'd use as an opening line -- I don't want people to have to guess at both the metaphor and what's being alluded to in the metaphor.

And are you saying you think the title is wrong?

I don't want to seem defensive, I just genuinely don't understand a lot of your criticisms and would like to be able to see from your perspective.