Alone

[addy]

I thought your opening verse was quite strong. I like it. Mainly my issues with this poem are with the last lines of each succeeding verse... they are pretty awkwardly worded ("from his eyes, how pitiful it seems" is confusing and doesn't sound natural), and not even in a way that makes their rhythm match the other verses (though you do make an effort to rhyme the final syllables). They are the only ones that spoil it, I think... so fix the rhythm in those and this should work fine