On JR Hartley

[critical mass]

billy

Lots of form on the boards I think.


Really good lines here.


I think the first two lines starting with "To" kind of stands
out visually. It doesn't hurt the poem but it makes me wonder
if there isn't a better replacement for one of them.


to cast a perfect fly midstream
and with a tug of line coerce;

Best enjambment in the poem I think. It rolls of the tongue
when read out loud.

Well that's all I got.
Enjoyed the read.

David