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Communion
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07-24-2011, 05:54 AM
Alright, Billy I think I got all your suggestions executed. I'm pondering. I do not think I care for striking the final line, and 'It is" feels castrated. I am going to walk away now. Will return for a fresh perspective later.
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?
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RE: Communion - by Leanne - 07-11-2011, 05:35 AM
RE: Communion - by addy - 07-11-2011, 09:05 AM
RE: Communion - by billy - 07-11-2011, 09:38 AM
RE: Communion - by Aish - 07-23-2011, 09:18 AM
RE: Communion - by billy - 07-23-2011, 02:59 PM
RE: Communion - by Aish - 07-24-2011, 05:54 AM
RE: Communion - by billy - 07-24-2011, 10:41 AM
RE: Communion - by Todd - 07-24-2011, 10:32 AM
RE: Communion - by critical mass - 07-24-2011, 10:51 PM
RE: Communion - by Leanne - 07-25-2011, 08:31 AM
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