07-23-2011, 05:27 PM
the leaves felt too obvious and the reiteration didn't swing for me. it's because i think the 3rd verse is extremely well written. and the 2nd isn't. i seriously feel the 3rd verse is quite powerful. the 2nd i feel was weak because of the most obvious of quotes and connotations.
i dare say most won't feel the way i do. if you had quoted 'o captain my captain' it too would have felt weak...unless you used it in an extremely unusual way. jmo
i dare say most won't feel the way i do. if you had quoted 'o captain my captain' it too would have felt weak...unless you used it in an extremely unusual way. jmo