07-23-2011, 03:52 PM
Thanks for the feedback Bilbo. I'm not sure I understand how the third verse is any more or less contrived than the second, why "comradeship" and "meadow's store" is better than "tomb leaves" and "leave of grass" (paraphrased quotes from Whitman); is it simply because the third is more critical of the wishy washiness it evokes?
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe