Burning

[billy]

this is just my take ck,

you need to use some solid images.
don't try and wax poetical, just be you.
move away from the broad strokes,
be definitive and try original simile or metaphor
or just be graphic.

ie;
the sun, hot enough
to fry a camel's ball
melted my need
for a quick shag

i know the above is trash but it's just an example.
be free with your images and if possible concise

thanks for the read.