(07-22-2011, 12:24 PM)ckeo Wrote: It flickered in my mindhi ck thanks for posting your poems;
an amber light in a candles wind
consecrated lines, like time drawn and thin
the heavens shall burn pyroglyphics in my eyes
solstice will bind circumscription and suffering
walk through my mind -- the silence is deafening the silence is deafening' is too cliche(well used)
sounds of my heart reverberate and ring
through the echoes of my voice lost and defeatening defeatening ???
I lay still in the night awakened by sanctity
my dreams come alive when the darkness is weakening
my blood boils high I cant escape from me
in the end its time to burn in effigy.
~ CK~
alway think of a title

for me it needs to be little less cliché.
i think it also needs a little more depth.
i enjoyed the following line;
the heavens shall burn pyroglyphics in my eyes, specially pyroglyphics which tie in nicely with burn.
thanks for the read.
