My first and last Triolet

[Leanne]

Sid, I'm just on a flying visit at the minute and don't have the time to spend on the detailed critique that you deserve here -- but for the minute, the biggest problem I have with this poem is that your A line doesn't fit perfectly into the L4 spot, so it's stalling the poem a little bit there. My initial thought was that you could alter it to "within that place where wondrous dreams reside", but to make that work perfectly in the opening/closing couplets might require a little alteration of the B line, and also something with L6, which is the one Billy mentions as awkward and I'm less than enamoured of also.

(I don't have any issues with the meter though, I fit it all into iambs fairly well)

I will have another look when I have a bit more time.