07-21-2011, 06:04 AM
(07-21-2011, 04:51 AM)Leanne Wrote: Haha, well, aren't you the tolerant one?Leanne,
(We don't normally do much critique in the fun section, but because I'm really anal about this sort of thing, the headless iamb in S2L1 could easily be re-headed with "she pouts"... feel free to ignore me though, it's just a bad habit I have!)
No worries. I respect your perceptive eye. Actually, I had written it that way in an earlier draft, changed it every which way from beginning to end, and will no doubt do so again. This began as a toss-away verse, so I suppose whatever I end up with is better than the original anyhow. Thanks for the comments.
Sid