Shard rhymes with promenade in my accent, so I'm ok with that one 
The meter falls over in your B line though, as:
of GATES/ linING/ the PROM/enADE
so the strong stress falls on the -ing, which is not natural. Perhaps try "Of gates that line the promenade"?
Similarly, "disTURBED/onLY/by PASS/ing CARS" -- the stress is on the second syllable of "only", again not natural. But it's not even 6am and I'm only on my first sip of coffee, so I haven't got a ready solution for that line...
The meter falls over in your B line though, as:of GATES/ linING/ the PROM/enADE
so the strong stress falls on the -ing, which is not natural. Perhaps try "Of gates that line the promenade"?
Similarly, "disTURBED/onLY/by PASS/ing CARS" -- the stress is on the second syllable of "only", again not natural. But it's not even 6am and I'm only on my first sip of coffee, so I haven't got a ready solution for that line...
It could be worse