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The Room
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07-20-2011, 07:41 AM
This is actually a very good example of a Triolet in a tight tetrameter. The only nit that I would pic is L5, which is not a perfect rhyme, though that does not bother me as much as the way you have slightly contorted the grammar, as Leanne has already pointed out. Even so, I enjoyed this and add my endorsement of your very pleasing simile.
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RE: The Room - by Leanne - 07-18-2011, 04:44 AM
RE: The Room - by billy - 07-18-2011, 07:52 AM
RE: The Room - by addy - 07-18-2011, 09:47 AM
RE: The Room - by heslopian - 07-18-2011, 03:38 PM
RE: The Room - by Leanne - 07-18-2011, 04:38 PM
RE: The Room - by Todd - 07-19-2011, 10:48 AM
RE: The Room - by heslopian - 07-19-2011, 10:54 AM
RE: The Room - by ICSoria - 07-20-2011, 07:41 AM
RE: The Room - by heslopian - 07-20-2011, 08:02 AM
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