07-17-2011, 08:55 AM
how shouldn't be the stressed part, they is (how's that for grammar?!)
those FORM/ less BEASTS/ how THEY/ conSUME
that's why I need the comma, really, to make sure there's a distinct pause as well as to make it grammatically correct, because even in poetry I hate making random departures from proper English
This way, THEY is emphasised because it's directly related to the beasts clause.
Looms would bugger the rhyme :p Besides, to me a single vision is quite a bit different to the myriad visions present in a dream.
Many thanks, Billy, I don't mean to lecture, I just can't help myself it seems.
those FORM/ less BEASTS/ how THEY/ conSUME
that's why I need the comma, really, to make sure there's a distinct pause as well as to make it grammatically correct, because even in poetry I hate making random departures from proper English
This way, THEY is emphasised because it's directly related to the beasts clause.Looms would bugger the rhyme :p Besides, to me a single vision is quite a bit different to the myriad visions present in a dream.
Many thanks, Billy, I don't mean to lecture, I just can't help myself it seems.
It could be worse