Done

[billy]

As barren as the haggard womb,
the dream is fallen into dust
and all around the visions loom,
as barren as the haggard womb.
Those formless beasts, how they consume
the flesh of innocence and trust;
as barren as the haggard womb,
the dream is fallen into dust.

the form is spot in with the ABaAabAB scheme being followed perfectly.

i'm having a problem seeing the iambic tet in L5;

Those form/less beasts,/ how they /consume/

i read 'how they' as two short parts of a foot. and yes i'm not knowledgeable enough to be sure that 'how' can be a stressed part.

content wise i can't fault it. it's logical, for me poetry with form can often be illogical, specially forms with repetitive lines. it has that robust straightforwardness associated with such forms.

if i had a nit and it's a really small one; would 'vision looms' work better than 'visions loom' i say this because you wrote 'the dream is fallen' and not 'the dreams have fallen' i do realize that a dream can have many visions. (jmo)

thanks for the read and the lesson on how to write a triolet