yeah vika, Leanne makes a good point about word order or word shuffling. often rearranging what we've all ready got can often produce better results. i know it's something i often do after i've written a poem.
the edit you did makes it much better, and it's great that you're editing
Leanne i noticed has some good ideas about how to start and end a line.
the edit you did makes it much better, and it's great that you're editing
Leanne i noticed has some good ideas about how to start and end a line.