07-16-2011, 08:56 AM
(07-15-2011, 05:23 AM)Vika Wrote: Today, I had this brilliant idea that II've played a little with line breaks and some word order -- always bear in mind that a reader takes most notice to words at the beginnings and ends of lines, and lines at the beginnings and ends of poems.
would sit outside
to let the wind dry
my tears
and the bird's lullaby soothe
my aching mind
But...
like most of my brilliant ideas,
this one
backfired
because the wind reminded me
of the freedom I lack
and the birds made me realize
no one is here
to listen to my song
It could be worse
