The Only Thing I Gained Was Three Mosquito Bites
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(07-15-2011, 05:23 AM)Vika Wrote:  Today, I had this brilliant idea that I
would sit outside
to let the wind dry
my tears
and the bird's lullaby soothe
my aching mind

But...

like most of my brilliant ideas,
this one
backfired

because the wind reminded me
of the freedom I lack

and the birds made me realize
no one is here
to listen to my song
I've played a little with line breaks and some word order -- always bear in mind that a reader takes most notice to words at the beginnings and ends of lines, and lines at the beginnings and ends of poems.
It could be worse
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RE: The Only Thing I Gained Was Three Mosquito Bites - by Leanne - 07-16-2011, 08:56 AM



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