The Only Thing I Gained Was Three Mosquito Bites

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The Only Thing I Gained Was Three Mosquito Bites

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07-15-2011, 09:41 PM

Thank you both for the feedback. I took out one of the "me's" and I took out a few small words.

Where would you suggest the line breaks Leanne?

What happens to the hole when the cheese is gone?

-Bertolt Brecht

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The Only Thing I Gained Was Three Mosquito Bites - by Vika - 07-15-2011, 05:23 AM

RE: The Only Thing I Gained Was Three Mosquito Bites - by billy - 07-15-2011, 05:45 AM

RE: The Only Thing I Gained Was Three Mosquito Bites - by Leanne - 07-15-2011, 10:06 AM

RE: The Only Thing I Gained Was Three Mosquito Bites - by Vika - 07-15-2011, 09:41 PM

RE: The Only Thing I Gained Was Three Mosquito Bites - by Leanne - 07-16-2011, 08:56 AM

RE: The Only Thing I Gained Was Three Mosquito Bites - by billy - 07-16-2011, 04:55 PM

RE: The Only Thing I Gained Was Three Mosquito Bites - by Vika - 07-17-2011, 02:15 AM

RE: The Only Thing I Gained Was Three Mosquito Bites - by Leanne - 07-17-2011, 07:15 AM

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