07-15-2011, 10:55 AM
the only nit i have is the first line. for me it's not needed and takes something away from the rest of the rant
i really like the 2nd verse as it reminds me of me hehe, i think
it captures how the masses act and react very well. sorry i can't be more constructive jack but i can't really see as how it could be improved
thanks for the read.
i really like the 2nd verse as it reminds me of me hehe, i think
it captures how the masses act and react very well. sorry i can't be more constructive jack but i can't really see as how it could be improved
thanks for the read.
