07-15-2011, 05:45 AM
hi vika.
i like the sentiment of the poem,
that sometimes what we think will cheer us up
often has the opposite effect.
for me i think a good image would enhance what you have.
try not to be repetitive, the two 'me's' feel weak.
thanks for the read.
i like the sentiment of the poem,
that sometimes what we think will cheer us up
often has the opposite effect.
for me i think a good image would enhance what you have.
try not to be repetitive, the two 'me's' feel weak.
thanks for the read.
