The Only Thing I Gained Was Three Mosquito Bites
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hi vika.

i like the sentiment of the poem,
that sometimes what we think will cheer us up
often has the opposite effect.

for me i think a good image would enhance what you have.
try not to be repetitive, the two 'me's' feel weak.

thanks for the read.




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RE: The Only Thing I Gained Was Three Mosquito Bites - by billy - 07-15-2011, 05:45 AM



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