07-13-2011, 07:49 AM
(06-27-2011, 07:36 AM)violet Wrote: All that talk of Devotion. Does this need capitalising?A soft and delicate confessional poem which conveys the narrator's internal dialogue with enviable finesse. Thanks for the read.
A beautiful sentiment, yes,
and one which i abide by, The "i" should be upper case.
but for what, do i wait? Is the comma needed?
Do i save myself through clear choice- "I" again.
because i made a promise, Ditto.
or simply because
another hasn't crossed my path yet?
Either way, I do not give to anyone.
But then, the choice is not mine really, Is the comma after "then" needed?
I do not belong to me anymore. Excellent last line Sarah. Sharp and profound.
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe