Communion

[addy]

This is a splendid love poem, completely absent of triteness, and the honesty it projects makes the passion almost unnervingly powerful. Great stuff. This would rival pablo neruda I think

You asked me once
gently, in the dark

why I love you so much. Lovely opening. Imo you could push this line in with the first stanza, but it would work either way

Your quiet earnestness
and soft pleading broke my heart. Don't think you even need this part... you can jump right into "I didn't answer very well..." right away if you want, as imo that part already so effectively conveys the heartbreak

I didn't answer very well.
Unexpected vulnerability stole my breath
and sinuous words slumbered in the void.

I love you
because you've always been with me. This is interesting, what you did here. This line seems innocuous enough, until you read all that follows

You are the disseminator dancing,
licking and stinging uninitiated ears
with every waltzing breeze past youth.

I love you because you're beautiful and wild,
and the roots of your soul
anchor thick in the ore of chaos. Great image

I bury my dead in you,
and watch God take form in your eyes -
as we conquer one another
cracking our communion rib -
and you know the worth of my intimacy. This stanza is simply stunning

I love you because in the spiral
our bodies are the place where power combines
and there is an ambition in our blood, to mingle

and be set free.