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Sorrow for the Stars

Vika

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07-10-2011, 03:26 PM

Thank you for reading Smile

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I will fix the "beauty" repetition... it does sound a bit off. As for the imagery, that is a problem I have always seemed to have. My style is simple but I understand that I need to come out of my comfort zone. I normally try not to change my poetry too much after writing it, but I will try and reword certain parts of this one.

I appreciate your feedback

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Sorrow for the Stars - by Vika - 07-10-2011, 03:01 PM

RE: Sorrow for the Stars - by billy - 07-10-2011, 03:19 PM

RE: Sorrow for the Stars - by Vika - 07-10-2011, 03:26 PM

RE: Sorrow for the Stars - by billy - 07-10-2011, 03:34 PM

RE: Sorrow for the Stars - by Vika - 07-10-2011, 03:50 PM

RE: Sorrow for the Stars - by billy - 07-10-2011, 03:57 PM

RE: Sorrow for the Stars - by addy - 07-11-2011, 09:45 AM

RE: Sorrow for the Stars - by Vika - 07-11-2011, 08:01 PM

RE: Sorrow for the Stars - by addy - 07-13-2011, 09:12 AM

RE: Sorrow for the Stars - by Todd - 07-11-2011, 11:01 PM

RE: Sorrow for the Stars - by Vika - 02-05-2012, 06:22 AM

RE: Sorrow for the Stars - by Vika - 07-12-2011, 07:47 AM

RE: Sorrow for the Stars - by Erthona - 02-05-2012, 05:05 PM

RE: Sorrow for the Stars - by Philatone - 02-06-2012, 04:45 AM

RE: Sorrow for the Stars - by . . . . - 02-11-2012, 04:17 AM

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