07-09-2011, 02:34 PM
(07-09-2011, 01:56 PM)jadielue Wrote: I caught love like a splinter in her womb,
as a child. No amount of alcohol, opiates,
or lovers could remove that.
The opening line is wowzers. I think 'as a child' should be stricken. The rest reads beautifully.
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?