07-09-2011, 09:30 AM
Hey thanks for the feedback. I would have to agree with most of these observations everyone. Indeed, the opening to the first stanza has always felt a little superfluous, unnecessary to me...I just really wanted to fit in melancholy, for a somewhat contrived connection with 'black bile' later on in the poem.
Regarding grammar and punctuation, to be honest I never really know how to use it when it comes to writing poetry. I go with how it would sound when read aloud and I play around and play around until it makes sense, to me at least :p. Something I need to figure out!
Thanks again, these are all really helpful as well as interesting!
Victor
Regarding grammar and punctuation, to be honest I never really know how to use it when it comes to writing poetry. I go with how it would sound when read aloud and I play around and play around until it makes sense, to me at least :p. Something I need to figure out!
Thanks again, these are all really helpful as well as interesting!
Victor