Backseat

[addy]

I quite liked the repetition, and that the grammar is switched in places... gives a maybe-confused, maybe-unsettling vibe to the narration. This is pretty tightly done, imo

I'd follow you. I would. Follow, I would. Down, deeper, down.
Past the six-step marker, the bones, thugs, and flies. Rather an odd combination of images but I guess the disjoint works... for me it expresses a vibe rather than a definite picture
Past the twelve-minute lovers whose skin sears the pavement.
Long past the since-been jukebox flipped it's first record, took me a couple of re-reads, the phrasing confused me a little
quite untimely, that I know of. Maybe this follow-up line isn't needed 'Mancing and dancing, Like this one
knees thrown overhead in sleazed, swiped, foggy-shine cars.
Past the church that's burned, alone, by itself, Love the parallelism (I'm assuming it is)
humbly for thirty-three. For thirty-three times it stood. Very nice
I'd follow you. I would. Follow you I would.