Backseat

[Aish]

I'd follow you. I would. Follow, I would. Down, deeper, down. Personally, I would take out "I would". The repetition is alright, but 'Follow, I would' sounds like Yoda in my head.
Past the six-step marker, the bones, thugs, and flies. "Thugs" after "bones" - is it an intentional reference to Bone Thugs 'N' Harmony?
Past the twelve-minute lovers whose skin sears the pavement. I like this line. I like the lovers searing the pavement and the 12 minutes to boot just screams sophomoric crush to me.
Long past the since-been jukebox flipped it's first record, I am not so sure regarding "since-been". I understand the jukebox is basically obsolete, and the new fangled ones have no charm, but it is clunky. What about bygone, or fossilized?
quite untimely, that I know of. 'Mancing and dancing,
knees thrown overhead in sleazed, swiped, foggy-shine cars. I think perhaps "sleazed" should be "sleazy".
Past the church that's burned, alone, by itself, "Alone" used in close proximity to "by itself" is redundant. Maybe "alone, forlorn"?
humbly for thirty-three. For thirty-three times it stood. "For thirty-three times it stood" confuses me
I'd follow you. I would. Follow you I would."And here again, "Follow you I would" has Yoda whispering in my ear. Sorry! My inner Geek likes to come out uninvited!