07-05-2011, 02:52 PM
(07-05-2011, 06:34 AM)Aish Wrote: Thank you very much, Jack. I'm on it!
S4 is now dangling. Jack, I had tried to avoid the cliche 'torn asunder'. It has already been whittled from the original 'asunder made'. I don't want to erase the stanza, but I also do not know what to do with it. I shall return...
(07-04-2011, 06:33 PM)Leanne Wrote: Instead of "as a soul"... what about "as my skin"?Leeanne, I am afraid if I use your suggestion it will read as if I am intentionally growing fat? I don't want the impression to be one of feederism.
I dare you to write THAT poem now!
It could be worse