07-05-2011, 06:34 AM
Thank you very much, Jack. I'm on it!
S4 is now dangling. Jack, I had tried to avoid the cliche 'torn asunder'. It has already been whittled from the original 'asunder made'. I don't want to erase the stanza, but I also do not know what to do with it. I shall return...
S4 is now dangling. Jack, I had tried to avoid the cliche 'torn asunder'. It has already been whittled from the original 'asunder made'. I don't want to erase the stanza, but I also do not know what to do with it. I shall return...
(07-04-2011, 06:33 PM)Leanne Wrote: Instead of "as a soul"... what about "as my skin"?Leeanne, I am afraid if I use your suggestion it will read as if I am intentionally growing fat? I don't want the impression to be one of feederism.
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?