07-04-2011, 03:23 PM
""To the last, I grapple with thee; from hell's heart, I stab at thee; for hate's sake, I spit my last breath at thee." - Herman Melville, Moby Dick
my nana thinks I'm too hateful.
over lunch at the baker's a fortnight ago,
as she sipped her coffee
and I my orange cola,
conversation turned to the British underclass." I enjoyed the easy stream of consciousness here. The Melville quote mixed with your hateful nana made sense in my own backlog of experiences.
"(outside on the street and between the tables
life continued. An endless revue of prams
and wheelchairs, petty arguments, true love.)" This strophe caught me off guard. I read back through, but it feels erroneous.
"is shackled in a carriage
on a ride through the gates of Dachau." This is quite an image of torment. I had to stop here, go back, and read again. Same effect. It lead me on an introspective path, meandering a bit, wondering about the ease with which gypsies, Jews, and homosexuals were herded into Dachau and whether or not being a bitch wold necessitate such cruelty.
Overall I enjoyed the experience your words afforded me as a bystander.
my nana thinks I'm too hateful.
over lunch at the baker's a fortnight ago,
as she sipped her coffee
and I my orange cola,
conversation turned to the British underclass." I enjoyed the easy stream of consciousness here. The Melville quote mixed with your hateful nana made sense in my own backlog of experiences.
"(outside on the street and between the tables
life continued. An endless revue of prams
and wheelchairs, petty arguments, true love.)" This strophe caught me off guard. I read back through, but it feels erroneous.
"is shackled in a carriage
on a ride through the gates of Dachau." This is quite an image of torment. I had to stop here, go back, and read again. Same effect. It lead me on an introspective path, meandering a bit, wondering about the ease with which gypsies, Jews, and homosexuals were herded into Dachau and whether or not being a bitch wold necessitate such cruelty.
Overall I enjoyed the experience your words afforded me as a bystander.
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?