Drive

[addy]

This seems to be one of your more subdued pieces, and extremely thoughtful. I quite like the atmosphere.

"Bloated with pills, liquor, smoke, and come. -
The chase, the artiface memorial of good
things said and done that passed you.
Or rather, didn't want you"
~ J. N. Day



Near the drive-in,
beneath the summer-
threaded nests -
torn in pieces
and strung along
the restless leaves. Don't think a period belongs here? This is a sentence fragment. That said, the imagery is really interesting to me so far
Our pick-up sputtered
and stopped.
It seemed simple enough
to walk home
across this bemused I don't think bemused is the right word?
place.

Yes.
No one ever
floats
in a good
place,
wherever they
are. I like how you use the structure here, to mimic the floating
We're dead-
weight.
Even the
children know
we all
fall
down. Clever reference

Thanks for sharing