06-29-2011, 11:54 AM
Jack, I promise I'll come back to this and give you a proper critique -- the kids are a little distracting today so I can't concentrate 
You're right about building form from freeverse, it's a great exercise and at first glance I like what you've done... but really, I'll be back, probably tomorrow.
You're right about building form from freeverse, it's a great exercise and at first glance I like what you've done... but really, I'll be back, probably tomorrow.
It could be worse