Upon reflection...
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(06-27-2011, 07:36 AM)violet Wrote:  All that talk of Devotion.
A beautiful sentiment, yes,
and one which i abide by,
but for what, do i wait?

Do i save myself through clear choice-
because i made a promise,
or simply because
another hasn't crossed my path yet?

Either way, I do not give to anyone.
But then, the choice is not mine really,
I do not belong to me anymore.
hi violet, sorry for not getting back to this.
it reads well and flows well.
and fits the title. i feel the dullness of the reflection, that said i'd have liked to have seen a couple of images.

while the introspection works well, i think it needs to brought out a little more.

thanks for the read. jmo.
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Messages In This Thread
Upon reflection... - by violet - 06-27-2011, 07:36 AM
RE: Upon reflection... - by billy - 06-27-2011, 12:27 PM
RE: Upon reflection... - by billy - 06-28-2011, 04:20 PM
RE: Upon reflection... - by addy - 06-30-2011, 08:35 AM
RE: Upon reflection... - by Vika - 07-11-2011, 07:53 PM
RE: Upon reflection... - by heslopian - 07-13-2011, 07:49 AM



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