"A luxury."
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I love the humility, Ris -- the bloke's carrying something priceless and otherworldly (in the eyes of those who would care about such things) and he's bothered by the fact that he's wasting a bit of cloth! Then again, the shabby rag could well mean his own flesh. For me, I think you could probably do without the fourth line completely and just have:

My bare foot' prints
Stain with boiling blood

As we already know he's on a road, from the first line.

This is intriguing, and we love a good skull mystery of course!
It could be worse
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"A luxury." - by Ris Yerg - 06-27-2011, 04:20 PM
RE: "A luxury." - by critical mass - 06-28-2011, 12:17 AM
RE: "A luxury." - by Ris Yerg - 06-28-2011, 01:03 AM
RE: "A luxury." - by Leanne - 06-28-2011, 05:35 AM
RE: "A luxury." - by billy - 06-28-2011, 10:20 AM
RE: "A luxury." - by Ris Yerg - 06-28-2011, 07:59 PM
RE: "A luxury." - by Aish - 07-04-2011, 06:56 PM



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