need to read this a few more times jadie, on first site i enjoyed it and loved the 2nd verse, which i think needs an 'and' instead of an 'an'
will give some proper feedback this afternoon when i get some real free time.
i'd be lying if i said i could get a handle on it, not sure i need to. the snapshots on there own are excellent. the flow of the piece for me is faultless, it's internal rhythm
carries the reader along at just the right pace. i like the read of it immensely. though some of it seems dark i get more a feeling of thats how it was.
wish i good say more in the way of feedback jadie.
thanks for the read.
will give some proper feedback this afternoon when i get some real free time.
i'd be lying if i said i could get a handle on it, not sure i need to. the snapshots on there own are excellent. the flow of the piece for me is faultless, it's internal rhythm
carries the reader along at just the right pace. i like the read of it immensely. though some of it seems dark i get more a feeling of thats how it was.
wish i good say more in the way of feedback jadie.
thanks for the read.