Volley'd and Thunder'd

[Leanne]

Thank you Jack -- I think that's one of the most excellent readings of this poem I've had to date, and pretty much as I intended (of course, my intent isn't important but it's still nice to know that it makes sense to someone!)

I've taken out all end punctuation, as I completely agree with you that it should be all or nothing and I hadn't quite got around to deciding which yet. Now I have I'll leave the commas in the middle of lines though, I need them for pacing.

Again, many thanks.