06-19-2011, 10:48 PM
An intensely lyrical piece. Sometimes I worry that the style comes at the expense of the narrative, which is a bit too vague now and then. But the style is so lush it doesn't affect one's enjoyment of the piece for the duration. My advice would be to talk more about the couple, which would put some meat on the bones. Thanks for the read Jade.
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe