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#8
06-10-2011, 02:48 PM
This is a nice, tidy little poem. I really like the food/taste metaphor here -- I think this could be extended further in the last line, perhaps something like "these days taste of childhood/memory/yesterday/promise..." -- you get the idea.
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Summer - by addy - 08-09-2010, 02:52 PM
RE: Summer - by Bianca Alabaster - 08-11-2010, 09:52 AM
RE: Summer - by addy - 08-11-2010, 01:57 PM
RE: Summer - by billy - 08-12-2010, 07:21 AM
RE: Summer - by addy - 08-12-2010, 09:17 AM
RE: Summer - by heslopian - 10-08-2010, 07:37 AM
RE: Summer - by addy - 10-08-2010, 09:18 AM
RE: Summer - by Leanne - 06-10-2011, 02:48 PM
RE: Summer - by kath3 - 06-11-2011, 01:30 PM
RE: Summer - by addy - 06-14-2011, 05:12 PM
RE: Summer - by critical mass - 06-30-2011, 09:04 PM



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