Is this 'Living'?

[billy]

Moments fly past in this jagged-toothed city is past needed? good image
We exist, sucking the same heavy smoke
kicking the same broken bottles that litter the pavement good opening verse

perfectly discontent, knock-kneed and breathless is perfectly needed?
listening to the whispering hours that pass us is the needed?
Missed chances shine brightly here in the suburbs

Senses are delivered and our manufactured decorations is our needed?
need no watering. Mechanical slaves do our bidding
giving us plastic when a simple rose will do i like this line very much, it shows that some things can't be made

Forests of car-parts thrive and mercury rivers surge past
Street lamps blink with harsh, crooked eyes would swapping with harsh round to 'harsh, with' add anything?
Painted structures open no windows to the sky

Swept by a current of free-flowing bodies accidentally co-operating good line
Part of the faceless crowd, going in the same direction is 'part of' needed?
The pavements flow with life and it's easy enough to drown another good line, is 'the' needed?

Scurrying around searching just like garbage-rats is 'just like' needed? if not just put a comma after searching./b]
caught in the pulse of our tiny existence
This humid cage of bricks and trash Is our home. [b]is 'our needed' ? is not Is

i really enjoyed this one. it takes snapshots of city life and puts them together in a way i can relate to. lots to like about it. my only nit is excess wordage. (which could just be me)
it has a vibrancy that all cities have. and a sadness.

thanks for the read (jmo)