06-06-2011, 07:25 PM
Thank you very much for the critique, Leanne. Notes and suggested duly taken on board! I'm glad you noticed the mass/church pairing 
As for the experience of seeing ancient monuments - I have started actively seeking these artefacts out, which correlates perfectly with my lack of poetry-writing. I'm blaming the monuments for stealing my creativity.
EDIT - RE: Your suggestions.
I think I prefer "enveloped by scorn" rather than "enveloped with..." I think I'll change that.
As for the experience of seeing ancient monuments - I have started actively seeking these artefacts out, which correlates perfectly with my lack of poetry-writing. I'm blaming the monuments for stealing my creativity.
EDIT - RE: Your suggestions.
I think I prefer "enveloped by scorn" rather than "enveloped with..." I think I'll change that.