06-05-2011, 06:50 AM
Cynical indeed, I imagine those women are quite attached to their buttocks 
I really love the sparsity of this poem, with the staccato first lines building to a longer, more lyrical... anticlimax.
One passing thought, and it's by no means a criticism -- have you perhaps considered putting (and such useless) in parentheses?
I really love the sparsity of this poem, with the staccato first lines building to a longer, more lyrical... anticlimax.One passing thought, and it's by no means a criticism -- have you perhaps considered putting (and such useless) in parentheses?
It could be worse