05-14-2011, 04:09 PM
(05-14-2011, 03:51 PM)jadielue Wrote: Serrated spineI loved this. Thanks so much for the read jadielue
Arching toward Jupiter -
Seeking God. This is just sublime; perfect, perfect, perfect.
Spires of gold
Callous wrecked souls
Angels weeping, falling. this line is mildly cliche, but mind you this is a very minor nit... it only sticks out in that your other lines are so rich and nuanced
"Wrung are we in misery-
for the dance of the gallows
has begun."
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?