05-14-2011, 03:11 PM
Wow, that is a fantastic image you've built your poem around. So unique and beautiful!
(05-14-2011, 09:22 AM)jadielue Wrote: "How often is there a moment where you truly see
rest in someone's eyes? I like this sentence, but I think it can be trimmed down/clarified. Twice, love, twice. Because
when you leave this world with the ferryman your
ever-loyal eyes flash two times, like the lens of an
immortal camera, fantastic the moment is captured but gone."
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?