05-11-2011, 04:09 PM
(05-10-2011, 05:17 PM)billy Wrote: Above the tree line—a perigee moonI take it this was more of a freeflow write; no pressure for a central idea, but just a mood type of piece. It was nice, but not really along the lines of your usual stuff.
sends its silver hoard I just realized, is this "hoard" or "horde?" careering "careening"over icy rapids
on the semi-frozen river passing hearth warmed cabins
to gather on dead pools as bats hunt on the wind. I liked all the images individually, but overwhelming as they came one after the other unremittingly like a run-on, just imo
Light covers the high peak with shadows a day long. Quite like that expression
Wolves, hidden and noisy howl their pack to order
as smoke struggles free from sparking chimneys. To me the chimneys had nothing to do with the moon, so this was a bit jolting
An elk sniffs the scent of man from the track of a snowshoe
before falling onto blooded ground; a casualty of a perigee moon. Great ending. just the right balance to give a quiet chill without making it too gruesome.
Thanks for sharing billy

PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?
