Girls on Film

[billy]

breasts bulging from cotton bras
shown just above the rim of a blouse,
light blue, sedate, to contrast with the blood
which drips down her arm. RED means passion,
check the dictionary. RED symbolises what the studs is check the dictionary needed?
would like to do with little miss priss, as she dashes
through the big dark house, locking herself
in closets to scream like an opera singer love this line
reciting some deranged melody.

or if her innards stay that way
we must endure a parade of dresses.
I'm sure as a girl I liked dollies
and dreamed one day I might marry
a farm hand with a fear of shirts, this is a funny line
but leaving childish things behind
is a talent these bimbos didn't learn.
so you're sitting in a coffee shop
and the rich jerk who treats you
like a charm bracelet has just proposed marriage,
while the infinitely more handsome actor
who would satisfy your sexual needs,
buy you flowers and not come on your face don't girls like guys to come on their face?
lingers outside, selling pastry from a truck
to survive. whatever is a girl to do?! would 'whatever is a girl to do?!' be better on it's own line?

I'm sure we'll find out before the pop song
which blares over the end credits,
and we take our date's arm
while he asks to share a taxi home.the last line feel a little off for me.

the imagery of the 1st verse is superb. for some reason and i don't know why, it reminds me of mj's thriller, and Jamie Curtis in the Michael Meyers movie.

then you juxtapose a love story with the horror and it works well, it has a humour that counters the blood and scream of the 1st.

the last line feels a little off, maybe a little weak, i can't say what it is but it isn't gelling with the rest of the poem which i really enjoyed.

thanks for the read jack (jmo)